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Good work week 12! My knowledge of this market went from nothing to understanding well. I think you were given a tough market as wearables are not yet in education. I'm not sold on wearables outside of education either but now I see the application, especially in the health sector. I found your website and your content well organized and easy to follow. I also quite liked the google plus community. Good work!

Great pitches Sayali. You speak very clearly and concisely. I think you have a great angle on this market, culture is very important and would help engage students. Great work!

If this was presented on Dragons' Den, I would be the one to turn it down. It looks like most of the reviews are very positive so I am going to add some (hopefully constructive) criticism. I think the content of your video pitches was okay but the format was not. In the first one I'm not sure what the spaceship had to do with the product and the beeping was very annoying. You have a nice speaking voice though, get rid of the fluff and just talk. Same with the venture pitch, don't scroll the website, either just talk to do a very simple slideshow type presentation with a voice over. Visually your website was easy to follow and was fairly interesting. I'm not a designer but I would change in your serif font for a sans serif. A sans and a serif font don't look good together. Online, sans serif looks much neater and cleaner. Now that I look more closely the font is sort of a mix, I would still go with a simpler font. I'm not clear on what new direction you are taking this product in. I would also be concerned about copyright unless you got permission from the creators of JIBO.

This is an interesting concept. I can see how it would be useful in an upper elementary classroom. As a teacher I would love to try it out. As was said below, you need to sell it more to investors than teachers. All of your information was good but it didn't answer questions that investors want to know. What is the competition? What are some numbers for the competition? What will your numbers look like? How will you get there? Otherwise, I enjoyed the presentation. It was concise, easy to follow, and you speak well. Good work.

What a novel idea. I have students that would benefit from this today. This is probably the first wearables in schools idea that seems viable. Social interactions are difficult for a lot of kids in middle and high school and especially so for ASD students. A reliable voice in the ear might be the perfect way for these student to deal with difficult social situations. I think that some students who would benefit from this device would also be ostracized by using it but many ASD students probably wouldn't be as aware of social stigma to be bothered (yes a generalization, I'm sorry.) I would also get rid of the religious imagery because I think that could limit your audience. Find a way to mention your faith that also draws in 'non-believers.' Interesting and engaging venture.

This is an interesting idea. I would love to see it up and running, I imagine it would have bulletin board qualities along with googlemaps or google earth type pinpointing of locations. I know it is an imaginary product but I would have been sold on the idea if I could see a prototype. As it was, I was really excited about the product. Figure out who is paying for subscriptions and you've got a marketable idea.

Your pitches were both well done. You have a clear speaking voice and your pacing was good. I can see how your product would be very useful and I'm surprised that it hasn't been done yet. This is the right time for your product to come to market. Copyright your idea! Your pitches were both very informative, you gave a good amount of detail of where you started and where you are going. The questions in the comments are valid but I think that an investor would be interested enough in your pitch to ask you questions afterwards. Good work.

English Pathfinder sounds like an interesting app. I'm not sure if I would invest in it however I can see the market for it and the idea is great. I would probably be interested if the product was already in beta and I could see how it actually worked. That said, you do have a clear plan to get where you want to go. If I were familiar the the companies you mentioned, I would probably jump onboard. I liked your slideshow, it had nice visuals. You also have a clear and engaging speaking voice and you sound confident and passionate about your venture. I found your venture pitch interesting but I now understand why eight minutes was our assignment limit. I found myself pausing the video at 8:21 only to see that I was only about half way through. I think that a shorter video would have conveyed your pitch better. I know that it was hard to decide what info was important and what needed to be axed but I think it is important to do. Great work!

Thanks for an interesting venture. It was easy to see that you put a lot of research into your venture. I agree with kgill and KBurden about the elevator pitch and the information going by too quickly. I used PowToons too and I found it great to work with but extremely time consuming. I didn't mind pausing and reading what I missed because even without bits of writing I understood the concept and why it is important. I think you are too hard on yourself in your reflection. The concept seemed interesting to me and you presented it in an engaging way. On first glance I thought your venture pitch was quite long but your writing is engaging and well organized. There are a few grammatical and spelling errors, not many. The one I picked up on is when you talked about yourself as part of the team. Choose first person or third but don't go back and forth. Minor, but as a teacher I can't help but edit writing as I read it. Very professional venture, I enjoyed reading and watching it! Heather

Don't sell yourself short! You nailed it. You spoke very well and were genuine. I watched the TED talk by David S. Rose, How to Pitch to a VC and being genuine was one of his top virtues. I'm not sure if you watched that TED talk but either inadvertently or intentionally you made an excellent pitch by his standards. I would agree that your market size might turn investors off but audience is everything. It depends on who you are pitching to. I was a bit worried after reading your reflection that you might come off as not very confident in your product but I worried for nothing. I think your confidence was a good selling point. I agree with brendanclark about your elevator pitch however I think it is incredibly difficult to pack information into a minute. Your elevator pitch did convince me that I should check out your venture pitch and that is its purpose.