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FEEDBACK – Good pitch, Scott! I found your venture pitch to be visually appealing, but the occasional grammatical mistake raised some doubt in your product, especially as the app is meant to facilitate mastery of English. You likely have a successful idea on your hands, as microlearning itself is a proven pedagogy, and you certainly have the confidence and drive to see it through. As an investor though, I don’t know how much you’re asking and what you need it for, as well as what sort of return on investment I could expect.

FEEDBACK – Good pitch, Shayla! I found it to be interesting and visually appealing, and your plans of a future timeline are reassuring to investors that you have a clear vision moving forward. I wonder how your product would have a clear advantage over the rest of the competition though, as there are similar apps and programs already out there. I’m also curious as to how the $500,000 you are asking for will be spent, and what sort of return on investment an investor could expect to see.

FEEDBACK – Good pitch, Albert! You clearly identify the pain point, and how your venture would seek to solve the problem. I believe your target market is quite a bit larger than the percentage of homeschooled students in Canada and the US because, as you mentioned, there are a great number of students whose parents already enroll them in tutoring services – that entire population would likely be interested in what your service plans to offer. While your pitch lays out some information, I am not sure how much you are actually asking for, and what sort of return an investor could expect.

REVIEW - Great pitch, Ryan! You have identified a pain point that affects the entire education sector, from individual students to entire institutions, and you clearly describe how your app would solve the problem. Your pitch targets just about anyone and everyone who has anything to do with education, and I believe we all have something to gain from your service. You highlight key value propositions, namely saving money, time, and effort compared to dealing with physical textbooks, which every educator and student ever would value. Without any competition, your venture seems very likely to capture your target market of educational institutions as well as individual educators with ease. My only questions are that I don’t know how much money you are actually looking for, as “a small initial investment” doesn’t provide an answer to me, and the return on investment does not seem particularly appealing to an investor who receives no monetary gain from your venture, so it seems to me that your backers would be limited to those who are directly involved in education.

FEEDBACK – Mackenzie, I found your pitch to be very interesting, as you identify the pain point, and you state how your product would address the problem more effectively than the competition. Your pitch would benefit from greater detail regarding the ask – how would that money be spent, what sort of return should an investor expect and when. You do have a lot going for your pitch, the expertise and the vision seem to be there, but I think a little more detail will really seal the deal.

FEEDBACK – Ghassan, your pitch is very detailed, but also leaves a few of my questions unanswered. Your software seems to be for students, guiding them through the development and execution of running a business, but also requires the assistance of the adult staff, who will ultimately be in control, if or when things go awry, so I am unsure how much involvement the students could truly have. Also, your software’s approach is to include students at all age levels, but I am having a hard time imagining how a kindergartener would engage in or contribute to the business – wouldn’t there be a slightly higher minimum age range in which students would be able to be meaningfully involved?

FEEDBACK – Ryan, your pitch is quite detailed, and your presentation is visually appealing. You identify the pain point, and you state how your product would address the problem. Your pitch would benefit from increased detail about the subscription (what it offers, how much it costs, etc.) if the ongoing support is what separates The Learning Box from the rest of the competition.

REVIEW - Good pitch, Agnieszka! You have clearly found a pain point that affects people on a global scale, and you describe how your app would solve the problem. You are targeting businesses as your market – relocation companies, car rental companies, and driving schools – but not the general driving population. Your pitch does highlight key value propositions to those businesses, potentially saving them exponentially higher costs in maintenance and repairs, but you also recognize that your price point puts your product out of the reach of the masses. I suspect many would argue that they already pay for automobile insurance, as well as with health and travel insurance, so asking them to pay out an additional $3000+ upfront along with a fairly hefty monthly subscription for additional driving safety (especially when most drivers insist that they are ‘good’ drivers) seems unreasonable. Your pitch does paint a clear picture of global immigration and travel trends, showing just how your product fits right in with the current market as well as how it would continue to grow in the future. Without any direct competition, your venture would likely capture your target market of car rental companies, and your plan to move forward seems to be both ambitious and possible. As an EVA, I’m not sure if I would invest in your venture for the main reason that I don’t know how much money you are looking for.

REVIEW - What a great pitch, Eva! You clearly define the problems that currently exist in the clinical environment, and then distinctly demonstrate how your app would address each facet of the existing problems. You know exactly (painfully clearly it would seem) who your target market is, with specific mentions of who would benefit most from your app, and your pitch highlights key value propositions that make your app very appealing to that market. You also present a clear picture of macro trends within the steadily growing field of Nursing Education alongside the rapidly ballooning world of mobile education technology. Without any direct competition, your venture would likely capture a large following quite quickly, especially if it ends up being the user-friendly mobile app it sounds like it will be. MyClinical appears to be in competent hands with the team you have assembled, and the planned timeline moving forward seems to be well-thought out and practical. As an EVA, I believe that your pitch is worth investing in for all of the above reasons, although I’m curious as to where to the remaining $800,000 will be allocated to asides from the development of the app itself.

FEEDBACK - your pitch is very detailed, and your website is very visually appealing. You identify the pain point, and you clearly state how your product would solve the problem. Your pitch would benefit from including if there exists any competition to your venture, as well as how your venture would generate revenue.