Lindsay

Hello, Firstly, thank you for promptly sending me your project. I found the explanation of your venture detailed and convincing in your elevator pitch. I also liked your description of what your product offers for learners and the current lack of such a service. You ended your video with “join us”. I would have found it beneficial to clarify whether you looking for additional employees to form your design and marketing team or for financial investment. I particularly enjoyed reading through your venture pitch. I found the format, with a combination of text and images, persuasive at showing your product and its abilities. I also really like your idea for the project. I visited the Louvre over the summer and they offered visitors Nintendo systems for rent, which act as an audiovisual guide to museum artifacts; however, I think your venture supports a different market, as it has tools and features beneficial for students, such as scavenger hunts. In your pitch, you clearly described a diverse array of marketing strategies effective for promoting your product. If I were a prospective investor, I would also appreciate your acknowledgement of challenges related to your venture and that you pursuing solutions to those issues. Overall, you made a compelling pitch for your venture.

Hi Sarah, Your pitches for MyHomeReading are convincing for prospective investors, particularly because of the information you selected to showcase and the phrasing you used to express your arguments. I found your brief description of revenue in the elevator pitch especially effective for indicating the success of your product, and how you explicitly described what financial support will be used for, such as expanding the application’s electronic library. Those are both essential aspects for potential investors. As well, I think you effectively described the purpose of your product, the benefits it offers and the affordances your application offers, compared to existing reading programs. You also made a strong case regarding sales success, by explaining the interest derived from your 30-day trial. The only concern I think prospective investors may have is the affordability of the program. While teachers may have enjoyed the free trial and expressed an interest, I am not sure how many schools could afford $17.99 per student. The other consideration is the devices needed to support the program. Since one device would be needed per student nightly, I wonder if it would be too costly for schools to support the initiative and whether, if they had sufficient devices, they would allow students to bring them home. Other than that, I think you did a superb job developing and explaining your venture and think it has significant potential.

Hi, First of all, let me commend you on an engaging and insightful elevator pitch! You clearly and concisely specified the key aspects related to your venture, including the pain point, solution, competitors and differentiation. I was impressed that you were able to describe number aspects related to your venture in just over one minute. I like how you finished your elevator pitch with the following phrase, which invites investors and highlights the potential of your product: “don’t miss this opportunity to invest in PEFT”. Although I really enjoyed your video, I was unable to find your venture pitch. No link was provided in the forum, although the post said your venture pitch would be there, and it was not indicated in your elevator pitch. I tried clicking on your name, as well, which provides a list of all of your posts; however, there was no posting with a separate link to your venture pitch. As such, I am unable to evaluate the rest of your content.

Hello, You did an excellent job creating the elevator and venture pitches for SoloHealth. I found your arguments regarding the pain point for your product particularly strong. You went into great detail describing the problems with the current health care system. You furthered the validity of your venture by thoroughly explaining the advantages of SoloHealth kiosks for consumers and meticulously defining the solution your product provides. I like how you provided an alternative type of venture, by focusing on the health care system, although I do not feel knowledgeable enough in that area to predict the success of a health-related venture. As a user, I am certainly interested in your product and think it could benefit Canadians seeking health care; however, as a prospective investor, I would like additional information on some aspects of your venture, such as the strategies for marketing, financial requirements (you received a 1.2 million dollar grant but I do not know how much more is required) and the prospective return for investors. Overall, you did a great job explaining the potential of your product in terms of benefiting Canadians and possibly individuals worldwide.

Hello, I like the website design you chose for your venture. Your presentation and explanations looked clear and professional. While I was perusing the information in your webpage, I was asking myself whether this is already an established venture. You mentioned in the company profile that the venture is in its seventh year and in the revenues section that you have already accrued $550,000 over a two year period. Your capital investment page states that you require an additional $500,000. As someone reviewing your venture, I would like to know more about what that money will be used for, since the venture has already been established and obtained significant revenue. After reviewing your venture analysis, I noticed at the bottom of the webpage that it states this is a fictitious venture. I am curious regarding why you chose to present a firmly established product, rather than one that requires initial investment for its creation. That said, I like your idea for the venture and you made a strong case for the purpose of Dig-eSpace. I found the phrase you used “a profile for success” particularly effective at conveying your venture’s objective. You also effectively described the design and management team for your venture and I like your idea of having a solutions manager.

Hello, You did a superb job at explaining the pain point for your venture, by employing a specific case study. I liked your phrasing, as well, and found it was particularly strong for demonstrating the capabilities of peerScholar, such as that it is “firmly grounded in published research”. Your selling strategy, with two methods involving student and institution paid, is particularly effective at demonstrating the potential of your product for generating revenue. My only suggestion would be to provide additional information about the team creating and marketing the peerScholar to convince potential investors of their abilities for making the program a success.

Hi Kamille, I found your elevator pitch especially captivating with your choice of music and colours to reflect the pages’ content. I think your idea for Workforce Technology Solutions and providing online training for industries has significant potential. What type of courses will be available on the website? I think it is a wise idea to also enable users to create their own courses to suit their particular needs. I enjoyed reading your venture pitch and I liked how you explicitly described the pain point. However, your venture pitch was very short and it was challenging to follow because there were no subheadings. As a prospective investor, I would have like to learn about your credentials as CEO, your specific marketing strategy and the parameters for investment. Overall, good work on your excellent idea for a venture!

Hi Owen, I particularly like the idea you presented for your venture. As a second language teacher, I can certainly attest to the fact that class time does not allow sufficient time for students to interact in their second language. Your elevator pitch was concise and prospective investors would appreciate you adding information about the return structure. In your venture pitch, you successfully conveyed confidence in your abilities and experience as CEO for the success of the venture. I like how you described the potential for expanding the venture to support different languages, as well. One suggestion would be to add specific information about your investment requirements and the potential return for investors, such as the projected time investments will be repaid. If I were interested in investing, my first thought about the two-month free trial would be that revenue would not be generated during that time. Great job on your venture!

Hello, Firstly, I found your title and catch phrase very engaging and it made me interested in your product from the start! Your venture pitch was aesthetically appealing with the vibrant visuals. One suggestion would be to ensure your first page of content has some of your own statements, rather than all quotes. I liked how detailed and specific you were with information about your investment requirements. Next time, you could also add details about the return, in order to entice potential investors.

Hi Kari, I like your idea of using Prezi for the elevator pitch. In the pitch, it would have been beneficial to mention Cloudle’s competitors. I noticed that you used Wordle in the presention, but I would have thought it would be one of the competitors for your software. Regarding your venture pitch, I agree that students need to participate in their learning process and that most teachers are actively seeking programs that support that style of learning. I think that you adequately described your marketing strategy, the ask and return, and made the venture appealing to prospective investors. Lindsay