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FEEDBACK: The elevator pitch is interesting, but it would have been great to include a live voice to explain the product. The music was strong and in a strange way it made ready the text hard, probably because the senses are not sure what to focus on. Using a voice would direct the user to the information more immediately. The main presentation itself had a lot of scrolling and I was running around getting information. I think a good question to ask from an investors point of view: how much will this cost and what will I get out of it. I'm not sure venture investors do what they do out of altruism, even though you do raise some legitimate points of pain for teachers. Well delivered.

FEEDBACK: I think it was a good idea to integrate the video with the investment piece. However, the investment piece, although full of ideas, required the user to scroll a lot to find the relevant sections. It would be interesting to divide the content in some ways as to allow more rapid access to key parts of the document. I am wondering if the amount you are looking for is a bit low for what you hope to accomplish. A product such as yours would require at least a million to get off the ground as there would be substancial Research and Development costs.

FEEDBACK: I think this project stood out because of its use of graphics which made it easy to follow. In terms of site design, it would be ideal for the user (or investor) not to have to scroll to access more information. I understand from other comments that the instructors were not looking for financial/revenue information, however, if I was acting as an investor, the financials would be a key component on whether a pitch was successful or not. Great feature adding your team...this added depth to the company you've created. Very nice work.

FEEDBACK: The elevator presentation was well done and caught my attention as it used multiple voices and good use of animation. I think it would be good to go into more detail regarding what the return to the investor will be? What are the revenue streams that your company will generate? What are you forecasting? This would be a good compliment to a good presentation.

FEEDBACK: This presentation is quite comprehensive and its great that you've taken the time to present the entire proposal. Your argument is pretty clear and easy to understand. If I were an investor I would like to know how I would make money on this project; what are the potential revenue that you foresee. While the need, as you identify it, is apparent and your product will provide a solution, its not immediately clear what I (as an investor) get out of it....other than helping the greater good. Good job.

Feedback: Very easy to understand pitch and elevator speech. Your directness is a strength. I think it would be interesting to include some mention of how the money is to be used as well as what the possible returns to the investors are. The site was easy to understand and navigate through. Perhaps some more images of the management team or even 'mock' product images would give an even more easier way to understand the product. Good job.

Feedback: Good to put yourself out there in the pitch! I think it says a lot about your confidence that you are speaking directly to the camera. From an investment standpoint, it was good you laid out a marketing plan and strategy; it made it easier to gage the potential of the product. There is a thoughtful comparison between your product and others which is very helpful. I do think that without sales, a 25% stake for an investor is too small. Given the risk, they would likely require a much larger portion of the ownership.

Feedback: I enjoyed this presentation as it had an financial plan included that showed expenses and projected revenue. As an investor, this information is probably the first think to look at. You have outlined effectively how this project will improve the situation for users. I am actually glad you asked for 10 million as its always better to ask for more than less. A smaller number may lead the the investor question: will the project actually be completed? Well done!

Feedback: I enjoyed your presentation as it outlined clearly what your goals were and especially your investment requirements. I think it was a good idea to set a reasonable investment target including the way it would be spent. It would be great to see when an investor would be able to re-coup their initial investment, but that may be out of the scope of this initial presentation.

Feedback: Hi Shane, Thank you very much for the elevator pitch. On a presentation note, I found the background audio a bit loud which led to some competition between it and your voice. I would much rather hear you! The venture pitch was colorful and animated but also asked too many questions of the audience which took time and were left for the audience to answer. Perhaps a more direct approach would demonstrate the idea by outlining the whole idea clearly in the intro to the main presentation. As an investor I am not sure how this would make a return on my investment. This information would need to be added.