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Feedback I can identify with the ‘Erin’ in your elevator pitch I to have had a long running struggle to understand the intricacies of citing works and when the time comes, as it does with every course I have taken in the MET program, I would give you cart blanch use of my credit card info to provide a reliable, easy to use solution to citing my work. I think this pitch, as a service, is a great solution to your pitch point and as an EVA “the ask” of $15,000 is appealing considering the market that is available. I would like to know more about how we can make money from this venture as I am not sure from your pitch. I do think you have something here but I would like the business model to be shaped out a little better before committing to it. I liked your presentation elements very much.

Feedback A Very concise Venture pitch. I think you have a focus on a very up and coming opportunity, especially in education. I liked the phrasing in your full pitch of “living a lesson through digital means” it worked well in helping me visualize your pitch point meaning. I also liked that you spelled out the secondary markets that this venture has an ability to work within. There are a couple of comments that I would like to add for your consideration 1) With this approach to learning, will users need to use a viewing device to take advantage of the virtual reality component? 2) You make mention of digital publishers taking advantage of this app, I wonder if a more lucrative approach for you would be to license the technology behind the app and let them develop for their own needs and you still get paid. 3) For the shared lessons that teachers develop and share on a lesson, are they customizable? Can I just download and lesson and take what I want to use in something else or in a different version of a topic that maybe more precisely meets my needs? I have to admit that the elevator pitch didn’t give me much meat to go on but I felt much more informed after viewing the full pitch. As and EVA if I could get most of the functionality described above built into the app I would definitely invest.

Feedback I know you stated that this is a fictitious company but I would say that the focus of it is very close to your interests. You make some great observations about the pros and cons of other products in this marketplace and I feel you are knowledgeable about what a gr 7-12 offering would need. There are a couple of items that I might suggest that would help define your venture pitch a little more. 1) The items you raise in the section ‘Barriers to Entry’ are very relevant but it would have been useful for you to provide solutions to each of the points you raised as a way to help an investor feel more confident that your pitch was working to remove these barriers. 2) It would have been beneficial to see at least a mockup of what the process would look like. As an EVA I don’t think I would invest in this venture at this time.

Feedback You have presented a very professional venture pitch. I have to admit that I am not very familiar with RLGPL but after reviewing your site and elevator pitch I can see the potential that this approach to learning, through GBL, can provide. Your development team structure compliments your venture nicely. There are a couple of items that as an EVA that I would ask 1) what is the price to play? You state that revenue would be generated through the sale of user generated content, but can school's, teachers initially just sign up and play for free? 2) Do you think your ask of $$ will provide you enough resources to gain market traction? I think you will require much more to get a critical mass buy in from teachers in using this approach to learning. This venture pitch is something as a EVA that I would invest in but I think you will need more money than you think and the ROI model you have set out may not generate enough $$ to cover that ask. Great work!

Feedback When I went through this Venture Pitch I thought to myself, this is a big undertaking. I wondered, based on all the different districts in different provinces, is this a one size fits all app or would there need to be a lot of customization to accommodate the specific needs that one district would/could have over another? Would this easily translate to an American market? To be honest I see this more as a web portal than a mobile app. In your pitch, you stated that forms could be downloadable and I wondered how this could be achieved on a mobile app. I also wonder how schools load all student data. Does each student need to sign up? Can a school districts provide a database of students and is that process seamless. I know in our system we use a student management product for parent contact resource, grade management portal as well as other features, but it is a chore to manage the student lists as they are created and maintained from a separate product. As an EVA I would be interested in investing in this endeavor but I would feel more confident if I knew that any functionality was consistent across multiple jurisdictions.

Feedback This is a really well designed venture pitch. The website lays out what sponsors can expect from your service and it clearly addresses a pitch point. Some suggestions I would like to make would be 1) For this activity, I would have loved the opportunity to have seen a short example of one of the lessons in action or a walkthrough of how to use it. 2) This was stated in another comment but is there a pricing structure for sponsorship? Does paying more get you more leverage as a sponsor? 3) It might be beneficial for you to list the sponsors who have committed to this program. I know you mentioned the Rotary Club, but if there are others it may lend weight to your endeavor to provide their names/logos to your pitch as a way for other potential sponsors to want to get involved. A very noble concept.

Feedback I think the layout of your pitch and your beginning elevator pitch were really well done. I want to thank you for also showing me about ‘Guided Access’ on my iPhone, never knew that the functionality existed. One of the biggest pluses for me in your venture pitch was that your product was device agnostic. I know there are different solutions for things like viewing students screens but usually, they are for one device or another (like Air squirrel or Apple tv), not all the platforms out there at once. As an EVA and a teacher, the ability to access students screen at will using sentinel makes me a little nervous. You don’t clarify if the functionality of Sentinal is only available during class or if one could access student’s screens at any other time to see what students are doing. This raised some cautions for me. Restricting access to one or two apps on a student device also may not be an effective way to limit students accessing other apps. This may work with school controlled devices, but you may have issues with student-owned devices resulting in some pushback from pupils over who has control over the device and what they do with them. I agree with others in this forum that educating students on proper etiquette and digital citizenship would be a more effective approach. That being said, as an EVA I would need more clarification on your ask as I don’t necessarily see Sentinal as the prize but rather the technology to have a device agnostic way to share screens and information from a user’s device to the teacher screen or LCD. I think you have something here.

Feedback. I like the idea of leveraging an already existing well know product into a new marketplace like education but I agree that you need to guard against the perception of those outside the classroom that students are “just watching movies” in class. Not to mention that some districts have filtered out teachers access to the Netflix site. There are other services that already exist in Canada that provide a similar service. I am thinking of Learn 360 (http://www.visualed.com/vec/learn360.html ) (http://www.visualed.com/vec/mm/Learn360Brochure.pdf) The NFB and National Geographic also provide access to “Mainstream” content. What they all offer, that your venture doesn’t is supported learning materials to be included with the service, unmistakably branding it as a learning tool. I think features such as this or additional resource material to compliment the market recognition that Netflix has. I like the features described in your pitch for your this service, but I wonder if it is enough. I am undecided as an EVA if this would be a good investment. I like many things about it but I think I would need more.

Feedback I can see the pain point you are addressing as it relates to you venture pitch. I must admit I was expecting a physical box somehow included in your venture . I am wondering if a subscription model is the best format for this particular venture? I would wonder if your app could have students spec out the material and you work with one or more of the suppliers you listed (I am thinking of Amazon and Asset Panda) to provide a one stop solution that would provide all the materials needed as specked out by students (wait for it….) delivered in a tickle trunk. Materials could be inventoried through existing software leaving your company to focus on developing the framework and criteria needed to address units or topics as they relate to PBL and either market those to schools or give them away as a free item, knowing the ROI is in the materials students/schools buy. You could price structure your venture to take a percentage of sales under the tickle trunk app and leverage the existing production/ inventory models already established. As an EVA, I think there is a potential to meets the needs of this market but I am not convinced it is worth investing in The Tickle Trunk at this time.

Feedback: I had to review your pitch a couple of time to get my head around the offerings of this venture and I’m glad I did because after my first pass I think I have a better understanding of what it is. I was impressed with your presentation format and the experience you and your partner bring to the table, but I think as an EVA you are still in the building of a concept rather than something I would feel comfortable investing in for a return at this time. I agree with others that some sort of a simulation would go a long way to helping and investor conceptualize the benefits of this venture and other than being a different sport, provide an opportunity to differentiate you from others in this market. That being said, my juices started flowing thinking of ways that could help a product like this standout and as I haven’t experienced any of them, I’m going to spitball in the dark here. You provide evidence of the size of the market for this product and I see that there is huge potential at the amateur level as a teaching tool It would be interesting, I think, to have the functionality to allow users to ask questions and the software provide real-time adjustments to the scenario playing out. For example; Where/ who is the point guard in this play? What would this look like in a man on man system etc.? I was also thinking if a coach could customize the properties of players (Height, stats probability, etc) in the scenario to demonstrate why a play would be run or is preferred against an upcoming team, it may provide a more real world perspective. There are many opportunities that VR related simulation could enhance and in the world of sports none are much bigger than that of basketball. Your venture has legs but at this point, I don’t think at this time it is defined enough for me to invest.