An interesting presentation. I am not looking to invest in this kind of venture at this time, however, so I will only offer some feedback on your presentation.
I applaud your efforts to bring the spirit of entrepreneurialism to students. I think the entrepreneurial drive is a critical component in growth in our society, not only economically, but socially as well. I think you presented this clearly in your elevator pitch. I do think, however, that your choice of a text-only format for your venture pitch might not hold the interest of investors long enough to motivate them to buy into your venture. I read through it all, and it was well presented, but it really would have benefitted from something more visually appealing. I wish you the best in the future of your venture!