FEEDBACK: Your venture is quite well presented and clearly outlines the problem and the solution. The cloud based solution is appealing, though your ask is not clearly defined. You mention crowd-funding, but you do not specifically ask VC investors for definite amount of money to invest, which does not give them clear idea how much is needed to take off this venture. The fact is that VCs like definite ask to determine is it appealing and viable investment for them. When you ask for certain amount, you can predict and offer the amount of return and offer the value of company to share with investors. Put yourself in investor shoes, and it will make sense to you. Overalll, good work. Regards, Milorad