Hi Aggie, I think your venture is coming…

Hi Aggie, I think your venture is coming with perfect timing; not too early, or too late, but just right in terms of taking advantage of the mixed-reality market status. I love the idea! As the husband of a primary teacher, I’ve learned quite a lot about how children learn through “total physical response”, and how they grasp letter sounds faster when linking handwriting motion to the sounds. A product that leverages MR to provide these educational experiences would be really amazing. To be specific, you did an excellent job outlining the “what”, “why”, and “how” for Scribe Right. You clearly did your research as you produced a lot of really interesting market data with accompanying visuals – great work. You took your time to outline the competition such as other apps that teach similar skills, but also made an effort to emphasize what makes your product different, through it allowing students independence as well as being able to dictate to the Hololense (really cool). I gave you 4 stars for the pitch, mostly because I really liked how creative you were to mesh “hot topic” tech with a pressing educational pain point! Here are a few things that came to mind as I explored your work. I would have liked to have seen a larger team to help you make the venture a reality. You seem highly competent but wasn’t sure you could produce this entire project all on your own. Also, the link to funding didn’t work for me, meaning I couldn’t explore what I assume was your ASK and RETURN. Huge Bummer!! You stated there’s “no way in technology to help students practice their writing in real time”. I didn’t agree, as there are many writing apps to help students. Maybe this statement could be adjusted to suggest that no mixed reality apps exist for it? I am also curious how you would convince teachers to invest in headsets for each student when they could engage in similar (if not quite as effective) activities on a free app with a stylus. You also mention the importance of being able to use the headset during assignments, but I would have liked a little more information detailing why existing apps can’t be used for assignments. Your goals and projections were related to the market as a whole, and I would have loved to have seen the goals and future plans specific to your company. Finally, you spent a huge amount of time detailing the “why”, with lots of great information on why a product such as yours would be necessary, but it took a very long time to ever get to the “what” (your actual product) and I would have loved more information the heart of your venture; Scribe Right itself. Please don’t take this comments negatively; I really think you did an excellent job here, and I enjoyed reading your reflections. It’s dang hard work to create a venture and I can tell you spent a lot of time trying to do it right. Well done! (and let me know if you fix that Finance link!!)