Hi Kevin,
I think you have created a great presentation. It immediately struck me as very well and put together. All the elements of a venture pitch seem to be there. I think this is a really great concept for a venture in learning technology! I can see the practical application to drama and how useful it would be. I also can see how it could be a great way of engaging students in literature studies, who might struggle with this subject. A VR simulation to help students get more involved and immersed in the subject matter could go a long way to engage them and help them learn better and even enjoy the learning that much more. Using micro-learning for scene analysis is a great idea. Sometimes longer scenes and texts can be so overwhelming, so this is a great application of that. I agree with your target market and think that this venture is very well positioned. I think that is the perfect age group for this venture. I feel like the competition section was a little sparse. I’d heard of the companies but wasn’t so familiar with them so by just seeing their names I’m not sure how they compare to your company and so that section I wasn’t fully convinced by or sure of it. I think you could give a little more consideration to this. You have a clear ask for investment. I do have to agree with what you say about possibly having too many features. I was impressed but found it all a little bit overwhelming. However, I found it all very fascinating. It may actually be that you have enough features for two ventures from this one! It seems like a big project and quite the undertaking to create the product but you gave a plan for phases of development to show you’ve thought about the steps and process for implementation. I thought that was good to have. However, I noticed that you called this a “Business Plan”. From the course instructions (see the webpage “A Game with Three Pitches”) I understood the Business Plan is a formal document and actually follows the Venture Pitch as the last of the three pitches. Since the Business Plan is not required in our course, I suggest you consider changing the title to that slide to reduce the chance of confusion. Overall, I really like your concept and venture and I think there is potential for this, and it could really transform the way language studies are taught. I think it takes a unique and novel approach. As you say in your reflection, computer simulations are more commonly considered for science type subjects but here you are employing technology for language learning.