Hi Melissa,
I really enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch and reading through your venture pitch. I think that one of the interesting parts of your pitch was how you appealed to the listeners to share your idea via social media, even if they weren’t able to help financially. I thought that this was an interesting idea and would likely appeal to most people who would watch your video- sharing on Twitter is pretty easy to do!
Your passion for your project is also obvious and comes through- one small suggestion, I think that maybe you were reading off of a cue card for your video- perhaps consider putting the cue cards behind the camera so that you are looking up more. I found it a little distracting when you kept looking down.
Other than that, I think that your pain point and rationale for your project were superb. I will certainly be sharing it on social media!
Sarah